Some kind of sanctity stirs beneath the strings
though disruption sought them in the blankness
of the mornings and the canvas that doesn’t know
what its becoming after last night’s mess-making.
Though disruption sought them in the blankness
stark against your bazaar fabrics that still
hold the wind of the country that spun them.
Of the mornings and the canvas that doesn’t know
how to form, as sure as the dress you taught me to fashion
pollen-dusted, airborne, swishing to fruition.
What it’s becoming after last night’s mess-making
is some kind of zephyr trapped between layers of good intentions
and long-forgotten dreams that flow through my fingers.
© N Nazir 2021
Written for dVerse Poetry Prompt, hosted by Grace.
Today’s poetry form is Trimeric, which was invented by Charles A. Stone.
The rules are pretty simple:
1. Trimeric has 4 stanzas
2. The first stanza has 4 lines
3. The other three stanzas have 3 lines each
4. The first line of each stanza is a refrain of the corresponding line in the first stanza (so 2nd stanza starts with the second line, third stanza starts with the third line, etc.).
5. The sequence of lines, then, is abcd, b – -, c – -, d – -.
Note: No other rules on line length, meter, or rhyme.
* I’m not a classical music buff but I can’t get enough of this guy. These are the strings I’m talking about.
I like the name trimeric and its form. And I like “mess-making” and the Bristol glimpses. Is this your city?
LikeLiked by 1 person
I really like this form now that I’ve discovered it. It lends itself so well to illustrating a simple idea.
Sort of – I like to think of it as my city, it has been on and off over the years. These photos were taken on a recent jaunt there 🙂
LikeLiked by 2 people
What an amazing poem! I love the style and the way you beautifully weaved these words…it’s magical to read! Well done, my friend 🖤🤗
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Ace! That means a lot ❤️ Appreciate your kind words ☀️🥰
LikeLiked by 1 person
The four line first stanza a great prelude to the three that follow!!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aaah thank you, Helen! ☀️💕
LikeLike
This is such a beautiful, beautiful rendition! I especially love; “Of the mornings and the canvas that doesn’t know how to form, as sure as the dress you taught me to fashion pollen-dusted, airborne, swishing to fruition.”😍😍
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Sanaa! I’m glad that section resonated with you. It’s such an elegant form to play with, I’ll definitely use it again! ❤
LikeLike
Oh! This is lovely! I especially like the fabric metaphor and these lines:
.’..against your bazaar fabrics that still
hold the wind of the country that spun them.’
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh thanks Jane! I appreciate you picking out that line. I enjoy sensory details like that in things that have travelled (though perhaps not so safe to these days). ☀️💛
LikeLike
It’s a lovely way of describing it, and I know exactly what you mean 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
“Some kind of sanctity stirs beneath the strings”
I think you have written a lyric ekphrastic here, Sunra in addition to it being a trimeric. The music is delightful as is your poem.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh thank you, msjadeli! I believe you’re right, it would be an ekphrastic too! Thanks for pointing that out 🙂 Glad you enjoyed the music.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re very welcome 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Sunra,
What a bewitching poem! The imagery of the fabric, the dress, the dreams all being spun and yet holding on to their origins and their craft is just as mesmerizing as the canvas on which you paint them. Love your use of the trimeric form to achieve this effect.
pax,
dora
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hey, thanks Dora! What a beautiful, considerate comment. I appreciate your kind words. I’m glad I came across this form, it unfolds gently and is also just the right length to give a glimpse of something. Thanks again! 🙂
LikeLike
You’re welcome! I enjoyed it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
This reads like an enchanting dream. Thanks for joining in.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Grace! It was my pleasure! 🙂
LikeLike
Beautifully written – and I applaud your choice of music with too.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hey writingwhanots! Thanks so much for saying so! 🙂
LikeLike
Sorry, that should have read ‘your choice of music too’. (I love Debussy).
LikeLiked by 1 person
Do you? I’m so glad 🙂 I’d discovered him a while ago then forgotten all about him but he’s definitely a firm favourite now. Have a great weekend!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Your art is such a gift! Always thankful for getting the chance to read your work! Seriously serious! Nice use of form, too!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aaah, thanks Ben!! Your visits are such a delight!
LikeLike
Welcome! It’s nice to swing by and read your work, of course. You rock at bringing something fresh to the page each and every time!
LikeLiked by 1 person
❤
LikeLike
Wow, this is really beautifully written!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Lucy! ☀️💛
LikeLiked by 1 person
‘Some kind of zephyr trapped between layers of good intentions’ I love that line. Nice photos too – the first photo looks very familiar! 👏👏👏
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Gwil! I’m glad you liked that line, it was a tricky one to pin down, so to speak.
Why does the photo look familiar? 😊 You’ll have to let me know.
I haven’t read your chapbook yet, but it’s waiting on my table when I can give it quality time! ☀️
LikeLike
You certainly pinned it down. The view from the window looks similar to many around here and you’ve caught the moment perfectly!
Enjoy the chapbook and have a wonderful week. 😊👏
LikeLiked by 1 person
I must say that the choice of fabric made me think how much poetry is like weaving… wonderful
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh thank you, Bjorn! Appreciate your comments ☀️
LikeLike
Really beautifully done, Sunra:
‘pollen-dusted, airborne, swishing to fruition.’ I love this!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aah, thanks so much Ingrid! I appreciate that ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
fabrics that still
hold the wind of the country that spun them.
so evocative! (K)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks so much, K! ☀️💛
LikeLiked by 1 person
I particularly like the final stanza’s middle line ~
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, M 💛
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh Nina…I love it!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh thank you, Filipa! 💕💛
LikeLiked by 1 person
I rather liked this one :-). Be well.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Jorge! ☀️
LikeLike