So many comely eggs in a line
good eggs, bad eggs, duck blue, powder pink
I used to be duck egg blue but now
I’m hollow and full at the same time.
Such hollow echoes it makes when you
crack all the eggs to make a perfect
cheesecake. It’s always far from perfect
but that’s half the fun of it. It tastes
like the other half of fun you were
missing. But the season for blue eggs
is over. Now the season arrives
for hatchlings to become. We used to
be hatchlings once. Now we’ve become like
so many comely eggs in a line.
© N Nazir 2022
NaPoWriMo Prompt: Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a “duplex.” A “duplex” is a variation on the sonnet, developed by the poet Jericho Brown. Here’s one of his first “Duplex” poems, and here is a duplex written by the poet I.S. Jones. Like a typical sonnet, a duplex has fourteen lines. It’s organized into seven, two-line stanzas. The second line of the first stanza is echoed by (but not identical to) the first line of the second stanza, the second line of the second stanza is echoed by (but not identical to) the first line of the third stanza, and so on. The last line of the poem is the same as the first.
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An ode to eggs and humanity. Love it. Well done, Sunra. ❤️
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Ha ha, thank you, Jeff! Honestly, I wasn’t entirely sure where I was going with this poem so I like your interpretation 🙂 x
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I feel I am in the presence of REAL poetry. Its enthralling to be honest.
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Ha ha! Ain, you are kind, this one was reeled off half-heartedly and I wasn’t even sure what I was talking about! Thank you so much, my friend 🙂
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Gosh, so lovely. Love your Duplex, Sunra. Just so fun!
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Thank you, Selma, my dear! ❤
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Comely eggs sounds about right. Wonderful duplex. 👏👏
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Thank you, K.Hartless! It wasn’t my favourite attempt so that’s lovely to hear ❤
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good fun 😊😊
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Thank you, Jim! 🙂
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Oh, the destiny… a cheesecake or a hatchling. I believe you like this form, I do too. It has a nice space for improvisation and variations. Two more days… We will do it!
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Ha ha! We so done it! Actually, I find sonnets quite hard. All that counting syllables. There were so many words I preferred that I couldn’t use so I used their less exciting cousin instead. I don’t think I’ve mastered this form like you but it was worth trying out 🙂
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Hmmm. I didn’t think duplex required any syllable counting, at least I didn’t. The examples I read were so varied and random that I decided just to make it free. But yes, a proper sonnet is wicked hard, that’s why I didn’t write one this April. 😀 I was so busy as it was!
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Oh bloody hell, I didn’t read the examples! And there I was counting all those syllables! Honestly *eye-roll*
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i like the progression created from this form, and how the context matches the form, very well done
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Thank you so much, Phillip! 🙂
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How fun!
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Thank you, VJ! 🙂
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Welcome!
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