And I
said unto him
she shall sing, she of the
melting horizons shall sing the
blues. He
turned to
me and said, but
the moment brings peril
there are demons in the wings, they
lurk, skulk
seek to
silence she of
the melting horizons.
Yet it is writ in star dust, I
said. We
can do
nothing but bear
witness to her song. None
can thwart the course of fate. Yes, a
storm is
coming
we must beware
but first she must take her
stage and break everyone’s heart to
pieces.
© N Nazir 2022
Written for dVerse Poetry Prompt Night, hosted by Laura, who sets us the challenge to write…
…either a cinq-cinquain:
- a series of 5 [entire] Crapsey Cinquains, 25 lines total
- syllabic count: 2-4-6-8-2 in each stanza
- written with or without breaks between stanzas
OR the cinquain chain/crown cinquain:
- a series of 5 [entire] Crapsey Cinquains, 25 lines total
- syllabic count: 2-4-6-8-2 in each stanza
- written with a break between each stanza
- last line of the previous cinquain repeated as first line of the next cinquain
- Note: The final line of the last cinquain does not have to equal the first line of the first cinquain, but it is an option.
Absolutely incredible Sunra!! 🌝
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Awww thanks Ami! That’s kind of you to say ❤
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You are welcome – perhaps kind but always truthful! 🙏
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😊💛
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A myriad of thoughts…wonderful tone…a knowledge that even if I attempted such word mastery it would ring hollow….and my favourite thought, that your poetry is so entertaining, so fine to read…I think it is written with readers in mind, hopefully of a certain stature!😄
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Ain, you’re so kind, thank you 😊 I’m not sure all my poems deserve such praise but I appreciate it. This one is a bit affected! I just wanted to play with the form and I was already referencing that scene in the film for something else so it was convenient. Thank you 💛
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You created a lovely poem … it’s a difficult form to master. Cheers!
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Thank you, Helen! 💖
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how very creative and unique – with the two voices and the element of magic. This was a pleasure to read, with so many lovely lines – not least:
” first she must take her
stage and break everyone’s heart “
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Thanks so much, Laura ☀️
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Oh, my! The wordplay… actually you are playing with words here, Sunra! Marvellous write. ❤️
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Thank you, Punam 💖 I spent most of my time counting syllables! 😂
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Lol! You are telling me!! I hate counting syllables. 😅😅
My pleasure, dear. ❤️
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Fantastic!!
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Thank you, Bob!
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I like how you wove a narrative into this with the two characters and this dramatic scene. I could imagine this as a scene in something larger.
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Thanks so much, Merrill! 😊
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You’re welcome!
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Wow! This is amazing. I’m not sure I know what it’s about but I love it. You have made the form seem natural and easy!
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Ahh thanks Worms! Just messing around. It’s not particularly deep, just a sort of ekphrastic response to a scene in a film I love. Appreciated 😊
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Stunning.
Love these especially:
“she of the
melting horizons”
“but first she must take her
stage and break everyone’s heart”
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Thanks so much, Shawna 💖
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Just a little something I found right now:
Thank you for your hand.
There are feet too. 😀 And a watermelon! And a lovely painting I shared. (If you don’t wish this link here on your blog, delete at will).
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You know, Manja, I deleted this page so I have no idea how you found it! I hardly ever go on FB these days, haven’t for a while. So that’s interesting to know! Did it come up easily when you did a search? I honestly thought I had deleted it and all work I had previously posted. Glad you liked what you found though 🙂
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The funny thing is that I didn’t set out to find you. I think Facebook suggested your page to me. They know everything!! But for sure you didn’t delete it… It’s right there accessible to all. To find it made me happy. 🙂
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Thank you, Manja! That’s kind of you. I genuinely thought I had deleted it ages ago. I remember doing it quite clearly. It obviously didn’t work! Still, I’ve done it now (at least I hope so). 🙂 If you can still see it, do please let me know!
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No, now you are fully gone from FB.
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Oh good! Thanks for checking. I am still on there with a normal profile but I never go on there any more, except to reply to birthday messages occasionally. I really ought to come off entirely but I haven’t managed that yet. I’m still in two minds.
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OMG the way you wrapped the last line into rhe next first line is amazing. Luv the story told. Fantastic cinwuain sequence.
Thanks for dropping by to read mine.
Much💛love
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Oh thank you, Gillena! 💖 Appreciated ☀️ I very much enjoyed yours too!
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I love the way you used enjambment to tie the different stanzas together…the image of melting horizons is so very strong
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Thank you so much, Bjorn 💖
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Wow, beautiful and forboding.
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Thank you, Greg! 💖
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Feels like we’ve crossed ways before. Why is that?
Anyway, thank you for finding me. Went through quite a lot of your stuff. Loved them 🙂
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Thank you so much, Rachaita. I so enjoyed reading your work too, it was bold, hard-hitting, honest. Appreciate you dropping by 🙂
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An amazing write, Sunra. The language, imagery, and feelings you convey are splendid. ❤️
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Hey, thanks Jeff! Glad you liked it 💖
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You’re most welcome, Sunra! Always.💞
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