My blind spot hides the assassin
who has crept through gardens to find me.
When I turn around, there is no one
but he heard my melody in the mountains
and followed the notes
through thickets and sin
now he lurks outside my house
backflipping down from the roof
waiting to pounce
but he doesn’t come in.
Puzzled, I watch him from windows
but his shadow has slipped from view
always, always, again and again.
The only sign he was there
is the tremble of violets
in the space he left.
He’s so clever, my assassin.
I saved myself by making him love me
but I don’t know how long this will last.
Show yourself! I call out into the dusk
Do what you will, take what you want!
I am met with silence.
He knows I know
what he wants.
So I play the melody he followed
play until he shows himself
then slips back into the shadows
play until my hands ache
play until
he is gone
with the morning.
© N Nazir 2022
Written for Shay’s Word Garden where we are given inspiration with Stephen Crane (words used: assassin, blind, gardens, melody, mountain, puzzled, sin, thickets, violets), The Sunday Muse (images as shown), and Poets and Storytellers United (theme: dialogue) where I have gone a little off-prompt.
“through thickets and sin” – great play on words. Captures the essence of the poem right there!
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Thanks so much, qbit! Really like your feedback 🙂
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A wonderful evocation of the way we both defy and court our terrors.
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Thank you, Rosemary! ❤ That is a lovely way to put it 🙂
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I really love the line “through thickets and sin”. For me that epitomises the slightly sad, adversarial, encounter of the night!
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Yes, I suppose it does! Thank you, Peter! It’s always interesting to hear other people’s reading of a poem 🙂 Thank you for your thoughtful comment.
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How intriguing. I love the mystery of it. I really like the second and fifth stanzas.
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Thanks, Bob!! 🙂 I like your reading of it. It’s Shay’s prompts at the Word Garden that sometimes spark off a curious write, she always has such good word lists! I never know where I’ll go with them. The word “assassin” alone led to this narrative. Appreciate your comment, thank you 🙂
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Ooh, now I want to know what the tune was! Maybe it was Fleetwood Mac “Dreams” and he skateboarded out. So good to see you at the List!
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Ha ha ha! That is hilarious! Thanks for sharing that 😀 😀 I have no idea what tune it would be . I’ll let readers fill in that blank 🙂
Thanks for a great word list. I read that poem In the Desert the other day and didn’t know who it was but found it haunting and then saw it on your page! So now I know about Stephen Crane 🙂
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Oh my! It would be impossible to choose a favorite line … your poem is perfection!
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Helen, thank you so much! ❤
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Wonderfully written Sunra! The end of the story poem reminds me a bit of a movie I watched once called “The Piano”.
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Thank you, Carrie! ❤ I think I saw that film many years ago? But can't quIte remember what happened. Thank you for your inspiring images 🙂
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“and followed the notes through thickets and sin” I love the entire poem, but this popped out to me. Your wordcrafting is exquisite.
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Thanks so much, Susie! ❤
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Dreamlike and so realistic at the same time. I like the fact that the speaker finds a way to turn something scary into something manageable, even understandable.
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Thank you for this wonderful comment, Magaly ❤
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Totally my favorite kind of poem here, Sunra, one full of mystery, deceit, sensual language and image and a sense of how fleeting connection can be in that “..tremble of violets/in the space he left…” I especially loved the idea of the lover as some sort of ninja whose trade is to kill, but who has been precariously charmed into love instead. A pleasure to read, every word.
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I’m so pleased you think it’s your type of poem, Joy! That’s wonderful to hear! Thank you for your lovely comment ❤
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Beautiful then and beautiful now! I love this Sunra! Thank you so much for being a beautiful presence at the Muse!
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Thank you so much, Carrie! 🙌 It was a pleasure and I shall miss it! ❤️
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A blind spot has me on the edge of my seat. I was thinking it could also be time.
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When you’re driving, you mean? Yes, that’s true. I wasn’t sure what you meant by the second sentence? Do you mean a blind spot in time?
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Your lovely poem reminds me of Scheherazade (sp?) and the 1001 nights. I pray he will reconsider the contract and let her be…
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Thank you, Lisa! Me too! I imagine he already has 🙂 (Your spelling is spot on, by the way!)
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You’re very welcome ❤
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but he heard my melody in the mountains
and followed the notes
through thickets and sin… lovely lines!
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Thank you, Rajani! 🙂
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Fantastic write, Sunra, mysterious and surreal.
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Thank you, Dora! ❤️
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lovely!
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Thank you! 😘
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Oooh, this is a fun little tale! I want to know what the next night will bring.
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Thank you, Kestril! ☺️ Ha ha! I have no idea, but now you make me want to conjure up part 2.
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“The only sign he was there
is the tremble of violets
in the space he left.” Love that. Excellent write, Sunra. ❤️
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Thank you, Jeff! ❤
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You’re welcome, Sunra! ❤️
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Reminds me pleasantly of Susan Trott’s “Housewife and the Assassin.”
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Ooh, I don’t know that film! Or is it a book? Thanks for letting me know Priscilla! 🌸
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It’s a book. If you’ve not read Susan Trott’s Northern California novels, you are in for a treat!
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Brilliant, thanks for letting me know, Priscilla! I’ll check it out👌
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So good. Don’t be a stranger!
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Thank you! You too! ☺️
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Thrilled you posted this for us one last time …. it’s perfect.
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Thank you so much, Helen! 🙌 ❤️
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