this romantic season
this fever of reasons
reasons to be cheerful
reasons to be careful
careful, don’t get caught in the tundra
careful, or you’ll get sucked under
under the wave you’ll go
under the falling snow
snow drift lays like sheets
snow, when we two meet
meet by the bridge of longing
meet by the sultry moon
moon over me, I
moon over you too
too many wishes
too little time
time wobbling into dusk
time, of the essence
essence of rosemary
essence of orange blossom
blossom into a love boat’s shoring
blossom into a milky morning
morning brings a nattering
morning brings sighs and things
things, not what they seem
things are a makeshift dream
dreams are phantoms
dreams are lanterns
lanterns guide your way
lanterns of faerie ballet
ballet into the future
ballet into your reverie
reverie of summer gone
reverie of summer to come
come what may, the mice will play
come what may, the cat’s away
away with you, blues
away with you, into the blue
blue shoes on a blue day
blue notes you whisper in my ear
earmark this moment
earmark this wish
wish it was easy
wish it was now
now will come soon
now is opportune
opportune
soon
© N Nazir 2022
Written for Shay’s Word Garden where we are given inspiration with Ghost Eaters by Clay McLeod Chapman (words used: romantic, fever, tundra, sultry, wobbling, milky, nattering, makeshift, phantom), We’Ave Written Weekly where the Poet of the Week, Murisopsis, invites us to write a Blitz Poem, The Sunday Muse (image as shown) and Poets and Storytellers United (Theme: Ordinary)
All the repetitions have a delightful effect!
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Thank you, Rosemary! ❤
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this romantic season
this fever of reasons
reasons to be cheerful
Great opening Sunra and you brought us along through a long journey
Hank
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Thank you, Hank! 🙂
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The repetitions add to that swept away by love feeling.
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Thanks Kestril! It was part of the form structure. Thanks for your comment 🙂
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Wow!
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Thank you, Su-sieee! Mac 🙂
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I absolutely love the thought of earmarking this moment! A lovely poem Sunra!
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Thanks so much, Carrie ❤
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Nice that you made it rhyme!! That ups the difficulty for sure!!
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Thank you, murisopsis! The rhymes sort of popped out as I went along. I did not find this form easy, I must say! 🙂
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Yes. I agree with Rosemary. Very effective! It feels chant like and the repetitions draw you in.
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Thanks Worms! It was a very rough write and my first attempt at a blitz poem. I daresay it would have been easier if I hadn’t taken on so many prompts!
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Ommigosh, Sunra – this is just lovely!
❤
David
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Thank you, David ❤ I didn't find it easy at all, I had to read through the instructions a number of times. I was thrown by the inclusion of a mouse? 😀 I didn't get that part, ha ha. Thanks for hosting! 🙂
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❤️❤️❤️
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❤️😘❤️
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This is a poem that feels like it would be glorious said from a stage, pulling the audience through all the emotions and images. Really enjoyed this.
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That’s a lovely idea, wyndolynne. Thanks for the great feedback! ❤
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Simply brilliant both in content and form. I can’t imagine even trying to write such a piece!
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Thank you so much, Keith! I’m honoured you think so! 🙂
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The List just wouldn’t be the same without you, Sunra. I was going to ask what a blitz poem is, but upon reading, it’s pretty clear. You boldly go where no Fireblossom has gone before.
–Shay
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Ha ha ha ha! You are sweet. Thank you, Shay! ❤
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I love this poem, Sunra–so many flowing images and thoughts that merge seamlessly, breathlessly. I’m very intrigued by the form, but found the explanation and example given at the link less instructive than just the way you made this, which is in a way that supersedes the form even as it uses its scaffolding. I love all of it, but especially the lines beginning with the drifts of snow, the secrets it can hide, the sweetness of meetings, and all the rich play of feeling you waltz down the page to the end. Really excellent poem. Thank you for persevering as you say it was difficult, but it reads like it just appeared magically on the page, whole and glittering. Quite the feat!
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Thank you for this lovely thoughtful comment, Joy! You are too kind to me, I considered the poem to be well below par! But I’m glad you got the sensations of it and enjoyed it, that is lovely to hear ❤
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Love the flow and the ease of rhyme.
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Thank you, Colleen! 🙂
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Be still my heart!! I “love” stream of consciousness poetry. Yours is stellar. Cheers.
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Thanks so much, sweet Helen! ❤
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Sunra,
The lovely Aishwarya is our host for W3 this week:
https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/11/23/w3-prompt-30-weave-written-weekly/
Enjoy!
❤
David
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Thanks David! 🙂
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🤗
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Absolutely love the blitz. The double tap start to the lines is amazing, and you push us through the flow nonstop.
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Thanks so much, qbit 🙂
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Hi, Sunra ❤
Just wanna let you know that this week's W3, hosted by the wonderful Sylvia, is now live:
https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/11/30/w3-prompt-31-weave-written-weekly/
Enjoy!
~David
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Thanks David! I’ll check it out soon 🙂
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*hug*
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And Helen finally voiced it in her comment…it was a lovely bit of stream of consciousness writing. Seamless flow, nice rhythm. Loved it.
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Thanks so much, GirlieOnTheEdge! Appreciate your kind words 🙂
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AMAZING in so many ways 🤍🤍🤍
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Thank you so much 🤗⭐
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This poem inspires my prompt for this coming Friday at Poets and Storytellers United. (Just thought you’d like to know!)
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Thank you, Rosemary! That is lovely to hear! ❤
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