I had a fit of the clevers the other day
ripped the arms off
an oversized overcoat
turned it into a hibernacle
then crawled in to sleep away
this ghostly winter that descended
unwelcome
like an out-of-place glitter ball
(beautiful but wholly unhelpful)
I imagined us all around the fire
like so many summers ago
toasting our bones night after night
in the liminal autumn slimness
fending off the blade of chill
each of us telling a tale in turn
how we navigated this mortal maze
some gallant time or other
and I had to crush that sweet bitch
nostalgia, who tried to court me
in the wolf moon hours.
What’s with you? I said.
Can’t you see I’m immune?
She slunk away to haunt someone else
and left me hunting dreams
in stealth fox mode
as I slipped between the worlds
beyond skin
beyond heart’s language.
© N Nazir 2023
Written for Shay’s Word Garden where Shay brings us inspiration with lyricist Keith Reid (words used: overcoat, ghostly, descended, blade, tale, mortal, maze). The Word list is still up until next Wed 11th Jan if you want to take part.
Surreal with all the feels! 👏👏
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Thank you, Tricia! ❤ I'm all for a bit of surrealism! 🙂
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💯💝
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“A fit of the clevers…” great opening image. And I had not heard the term hibernacle before. Such treasures! I appreciate your posts, Sunra.
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Thank you for your wonderful comment, Michael! It’s an old quaint English phrase no one ever seems to use any more. I agree, hibernacle is a juicy word! 🙂
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The old-timey ones are the best.
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I agree! Read any Agatha Christie book, there’s always a few in there!
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🙏🏻💙
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❤
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I rather love the idea of a hibernacle for retiring from the winter, and that music is magical!
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Ha ha, thanks Peter! Yes, her music is amazing.
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Wow, woman! From the first line to the last, this blew me out of my chair out the door down the hall and out the window. A fit of the clevers indeed. That made me laugh, but by the time I got to the end I was sighing. I had to look up “hibernacle”… what a cool word! I loved “some gallant time or other”, it’s so perfectly put. And the entire last stanza, whew! The casual language puts one off guard for a moment for the deeper waters it contains. Absolutely one of my all-time favorites of yours!
On another note, I was listening to the music while preparing my morning gruel (“More?” squeaks Oliver) and smiled to think that because you know this piece, and because we’re friends, now here it is playing in the early hours at my house. That’s a kind of simple magic, don’t you think?
–Shay
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Shay, I love your whole comment, ha ha! Thank you for your kind comments, I’m so pleased you liked it!! I read a lot so all kinds of words and phrases pop out of my head when I do a free write. I also love the word hibernacle. It’s quite similar to a tabernacle, I guess.
And I absolutely agree, that is a simple magic and a wonderful thing! I love that my little imprint on the internet extended across the Atlantic to connect with you in your kitchen in another time zone. Thanks for telling me that 🙂 ❤
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Winter’s chill can do this to a person. Love it.
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Thank you, VJ! 🙂
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So welcome!
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Love the last stanza. I’m not familiar with Shusheela Raman, but the song is fantastic, and will be checking out more of her songs.
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Thanks Bob! Yeah, she’s great. Lucky you, you have 5 albums to catch up on and enjoy!! 🙂 This one’s from her first album Salt Rain, which is stunning.
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I am so captivated by this. Look forward reading more of your work x
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Thank you, nocturnalfields! 🙂
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Gorgeous. The moon is properly beastly this time. It lured me out to the woods without the dog.
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Thank you, Manja!! Without the dog?! Conclusion: that must mean you’re the wolf!! 🙂
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As David Thewlis says in “Naked”: “I used to be a werewolf but I’m alright noooouuuuuwwwwww!”
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Ha ha! I haven’t seen this film but it looks good 🙂
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Ah I absolutely love that last stanza, Sunra. What a clever write and the title is so intriguing! Amazingly done as always, dear friend 🤍🤗🤍🤗
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Thanks so much, Grace, always, for your kind comments ❤ Really glad you liked it. I'm not sure what I was really thinking with the title, I think something to do with alignment. I always write stream 🙂
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You are always welcome, dear friend! Well sometimes when we’re not thinking the best creation comes out 😊. Keep on shining 🔥🙌🏻🤗
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I am so captivated by this. Cannot wait to read more of your work x
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Thanks so much for this kind comment, cgionco6 🙂 I’m glad.
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love all the subtle sound in this, and rather unique imagery, and all of that held in balance… until the last stanza, which exploded out. very well done, one of your best i think
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Thank you, Phillip! Really appreciate you saying so 🙂
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This is really beautiful, Sunra. I especially love the ending – beyond heart’s language. Great phrase! And the blade of chill – love that too. And the concept of a hibernacle made from an overcoat sleeve. ❤️. A really lovely poem.
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Thank you, Worms! It was a bit of a ramble I decided to leave unedited. Glad you liked those lines! 🌟
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“I had a fit of the clevers the other day” I love that line and everyone that followed. Beautiful creative writing!
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Thank you so much, Susie! I’m delighted 🌟
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“I had a fit of the clevers the other day” – absolutely awesome first line.
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Ha ha! Thank you, qbit! 🙂
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Wow. This was beautiful and haunting. I really loved it.
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Thanks so much, Bridgette! ❤
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