A Heaving Petticoats Poem

It’s true, I said, I’m musically promiscuous
but I thought you were too?  

Surely we belong together?
What a gorgeous catastrophe,

you replied, how we flamenco like this 
but never meet, not really.

Then let’s rewrite the script, I urged
let’s go one cerulean afternoon

to the cottonwoods 
where the bees wallow

and make like a samba in the zinnias.  
No one need ever know!  Besides

I wore my peignoir for you
and the moment is already cyanic.

You give me some kind of all-overishness
damn you! you declared, but got up

gruntled, took my hand
and led me there.

© N Nazir 2023

Written for Shay’s Word Garden where Shay brings us inspiration with award-winning poet Alicia Suskin Ostriker, with the word list taken from her poetry collection The Crack in Everything (words used: gorgeous, catastrophe, flamenco, cerulean, cottonwoods, bees, samba, zinnias).

Written also for Sammi Scribbles Writing Prompt: Script, 100 words.

*This is really a belated Throwback Thursday 🙂 But has also been my earworm this week.

38 thoughts on “A Heaving Petticoats Poem

  1. This is wonderful, Sunra! It feels light and fun and you use the words so inventively and beautifully. I love how the bees wallow and I love that you use “gruntled”. It’s a favourite joke between my Dad and I to use words without their usual prefixes like that.

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    1. Thank you, Worms! Glad you like it 🙂 That’s a great game! The thing is, words like that are all legit but no one really uses them except in the negative. It’s the first time I’ve used gruntled, though! 🙂


  2. Oh, look at that, my bodice is ripped. Wonder how that happened? 😛

    This is so much fun and chock full of Sunra-isms like “all-overishness.” I think the musically promiscuous (or Song Slut as i like to call myself!) get more out of life and certainly more out of their playlists. From the title to the last line, this is just a pleasure to read on a Sunday morning.

    Re: the song. I was too little to be aware of Cream at the time, but several years later I was wandering around the college bookstore and found Cream’s first album and bought it. IIRC this was the opening track. I love that entire album still to this day. One benefit, I suppose, of having been more interested in playing jacks and watching Gilligan’s Island than in counterculture, was the opportunity to discover all that fantastic music after the fact. Like something? They probably have a back catalog of ten albums! Anyway, “I Feel Free” is such a good song. Belinda Carlisle did it in the 80s or 90s, too.

    Happy weekend, woman!


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    1. Ha ha ha! Thanks so much, Shay! I’ve got to give credit to your list for such great words to play with – I mean, cerulean is one of my favourite blues. And all the musical references which helped pace the poem along. I love that you think “all-overishness” is a Sunra-ism, I wish it was! It’s actually an archaic word no one uses any more to describe a feeling of unease. I’m trying to bring all the old words back!

      And I hear you, I too wasn’t very familiar with Cream, in fact, I only know a handful of their songs, but an old school friend once included this song on a mix tape she did for me in the 90s and I’ve loved the song ever since. I mean, those winsome harmonies are just exquisite?! Who sings like that on rock songs any more?

      Happy weekend to you too, my friend!


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