The wind feels like peace hiding inside a cave.
Fire idles, stilling, while a dream stumbles forth
in a slant of sage. Its healing smoke, a wave
of vision, rescooping itself from dust and morning.
The earth is a semblance of all things brave
still-turning, ever-burning. And 9 is Jupiter
turned on its head, abundant, as if to pave
the way ahead, bowing on one knee, facing north
while a peace of wind echoes like a song you crave.
© N Nazir 2024
*Written for dVerse, hosted by Grace who challenges us to write a magic 9 poem, i.e. a poem of 9 lines, with meter and line length at the discretion of the poet, using rhyme scheme a b a c a d a b a (c and d are unrhymed).
*I recently did a poetry workshop where we were inspired to write whatever came to mind using Chinese characters. I adapted one of these free writes to the magic 9 poem. It felt serendipitous as I had mentioned 9 in the original write so it already seemed in harmony with this form🌟
I like the mystical feel of this, and the use of the word ‘peace’.
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Thank you, Jane! 🌟
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I get such a cosmic dream feeling from this. I love the flow of it.
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Thanks so much, Merril! 💕 I prefer writing stream more and more these days.
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You’re welcome. 🌸
That’s sort of how I started mine, then went back and revised it.
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Your adaptation worked tremendously well and resulted in a fabulous poem, and I love the artwork you chose to head it.
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Thanks so much, Peter! I’m glad you liked the poem. And yes there was a whole array of great cave photos. I chose this one cos it appeared to have a heart-shaped opening ☺️
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Serendipitious indeed, Sunra. I’m particularly taken with these lines:
a dream stumbles forth
in a slant of sage. Its healing smoke, a wave
of vision,
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Thank you, msjadeli! ☺️
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You’re welcome ❤
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An enchantment. (K)
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Thank you so much, K ❤️
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This reads like a mystical dream. Love the ending line: while a peace of wind echoes like a song you crave.
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Thanks so much, Grace 💕
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Nice one Sunra
much♡love
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Thank you, Gillena! 💕 You know, I’ve tried to comment on your blog a few times but it won’t let me! Apologies for that, not sure how to get round it. But I also enjoy reading your work.
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I love the title, Sunra, which already lends so much colour to your Magic 9, and sets it up for the fire. I especially love the idea of ‘peace hiding inside a cave’, and the dream stumbling ‘in a slant of sage’.
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Kim ❤️
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My pleasure, Sunra!
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My pleasure, Nina!
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that first line gabbed me and the rest of the poem such a joy to read and re-read. what an image this:”a slant of sage. “
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Thank you so much, Laura! I’m delighted you found it “a joy to read and reread”!! 💕
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Beautiful flow, Sunra, to this mystic/cosmic write. I love “And 9 is Jupiter
turned on its head, abundant, as if to pave
the way ahead, bowing on one knee, facing north
while a peace of wind echoes like a song you crave.”
Serendipitous indeed. ❤️
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Punam, thanks so much for your lovely comment ❤️ It is a curious image, isn’t it? Chinese characters are so pictorial, I’m always affected by ekphrasis, so it came to mind as I was writing. So glad you found it mystic/cosmic 💕
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You are so welcome. Yes, a very intriguing image. Your ekphrastic writes are so unique and creative. Always love your words. 💖
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❤️
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This took me back to reading Carlos Casteneda and The Teachings of Don Juan – a magical Magical 9, Sunra…
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Ha ha! Thank you!! That book also left a lasting impact on me, so perhaps the effects of it unwittingly creep into my writes 🙂
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I was so drawn into the swirl of your words, a wind in themselves, yes, “a peace of wind echoes like a song you crave.” What a lovely Magic 9, Sunra! (Jupiter…”bowing on one knee”—Fantastic.) 👍
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Thank you, Dora! ☺️ It’s a new form for me and I’m glad I tried it out! Appreciated, my friend.
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🙌🤗
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I adore the last line, what a fine ending.
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Thanks so much, pandamoniumcat! ☺️
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I like how you started and ended with the wind of peace
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Thank you, Debi 🌺
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A gorgeous magic 9! Visually stunning, I feel peace, optimism, beauty in each line.
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Thanks so much, Helen! ❤️😘
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This is magical, Sunra. 🙂
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Thank you, Kitty! 💕
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So lyrical! Especially the last line: “while a peace of wind echoes like a song you crave.” A peace of wind is an excellent turn of phrase.
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Thanks so much, Kim! ❤️
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Nice 👏👏
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Thank you, Sunra, for the extraordinary poem and the perfect image for your words!
Joanna
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Thank you for dropping by and reading, Joanna! I’m so glad you like it. Yes, I was quite pleased when I found that image! 🙂
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My pleasure, Sunra!
Joanna
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I agree there is a mysteriousness about this that makes me want to venture into the cave.
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Thank you, Melissa.
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Beautiful last line. This is a great poem. ❤️
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Thanks so much, Amethyst Lamb 🌺
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