A stoned firecracker rests in electric inertia.
Best avoid its orbit
lest it pop and whizz out of the blue.
You may never quite bumble the same.
Winter knows patience like no other.
As a tomcat whistles in the pseudo-holy silence,
so pseudo it’s authentic,
the kenopsia of a bank holiday,
a woman steals a smoke out of a window,
starlorn, wondering if the forecast
will again be coffin-shaped,
in the craxis of the southern hemisphere,
in the ocean’s temper
where so many dare to bridge
but never cross,
in places where women turn fury into razor intelligence,
gut blues into daily cunning
to cradle a quiet dream or two
dreaming, as a way to survive.
For what is torment but a place with closed doors
and no keys, no password?
Where is the heartspur then?
Nowhere to rest your eyes
not even a patch of sky.
Cats.
They know how to –
but would never care to tell you.
© N. Nazir 2021
Written for Shay’s Word Garden, with prompt words inspired by the lyrics of Laura Nyro (who I didn’t know until now). Words used: stoned, firecracker, winter, patience, tomcat, whistle, holy, forecast, coffin, cradle, cats.
Written also for dVerse Tuesday Poetics, hosted by Linda. The challenge being to pick some words from the ten Linda has selected from the Dictionary of Obscure Sorrows and use these in your poem. I used the four below:
Starlorn: a sense of loneliness looking up at the night sky, feeling like a castaway in the middle of the ocean, whose currents are steadily carrying off all other castaways.
Kenopsia: the atmosphere of a place that is usually bustling with people but is now abandoned and quiet.
Craxis: the unease of knowing how quickly your circumstances could change on you – that no matter how carefully you shape your life into what you want it to be, the whole thing could be overturned in an instant.
Heartspur: an unexpected surge of emotion in response to a seemingly innocuous trigger- the distinctive squeal of a rusty fence, a key change in an old pop song, the hint of a certain perfume- which feels all the more intense because you can’t quite pin it down.
Ahh! First of all I had to do a doublecheck of the caption. 😀 All glory to you for showcasing this beautiful cat from Vipava. One line of my ancestors is just from thereabouts. But then the poem… Not only you incorporate all these stunning words (heartspur!!), but I loved so many other lines, everything from the coffin-shaped forecast to those bridges and dreaming as a way to survive. Just lovely.
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Manja!!! Hello, my dear. Yes, it was a gorgeous feline. I was working there for a few weeks that summer and I went for a walk after school and all manner of creatures crossed my path but none that would let me take a picture! Except this beauty.
Had I known you then, I would have gladly met up with you for a photography walk! 🙂
So glad you like the poem, thank you. Your words means a lot to me ❤
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I’m glad that Vipava and its critters were good to you. 🙂
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They were. The whole place is suffused with good aura ☀️
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This is so beautiful and you have deftly woven in the words. Love!
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Thank you so much, Linda, that’s very kind of you to say 🙂
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You’ve taken the strands of both word sets and woven them into a symmetric and speaking whole. I love so much here, the pseudo that nudges itself into real, the coffin-shaped forecast, indeed, that whole stanza,and the way you have used the cats, so reflective of their austere sort of attachments that only go so far where feline secrets are concerned…really a pleasure to read, from beginning to end.
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Hedgewitch!! Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and insights; I love how you read my poems and see so much, I’m honoured ❤
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Oh, that opening stanza was fantastic, Sunra! I also love the way you close. In fact, I love your entire verse! ❤️
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Dear Punam, thank you so much ❤
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My pleasure, dear. 🙂
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No, they keep it to themselves, rotten kitties! 🙂 I’m so glad you decided to try the word list, and combining it with Linda’s worked out splendidly here. I especially like the woman stealing a smoke, starlorn.
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Thanks so much, Shay! I love your word lists, they provoke poetry from people! And I always learn about a new person and their work even if I don’t always write a poem, so thank you 🙂
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For sure, a cat would never give up its secrets! A lovely poem, Sunra. And I am interested to learn you have been to Vipava. Did you eat any cherries or peaches?
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Ha ha ha! Funny you should ask that, I ate peaches, actually! Great big juicy ones. And a watermelon. Thank you, I’m glad you liked the poem 🙂
Yes, I’ve worked there a couple of times as short term summer work in a school teaching English. It’s a wonderful town with lovely people and atmosphere 🙂
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How interesting! I think I’ve seen enough of Slovenia to last a lifetime 🤣
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I bet you have! It’s a lovely part of the world to reside 🙂
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Wonderful. I especially like the first line.
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Thank you, Bob! 🙂
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You have my heart with this one, Sunra! Especially resonate with; “For what is torment but a place with closed doors and no keys, no password? Where is the heartspur then? Nowhere to rest your eyes not even a patch of sky.”💝💝
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Thank you so much, Sanaa! It’s rather bleak, that section, I know. Glad it resonated with you, and I so appreciate your kind words ❤
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This is so good, especially the end… cats have their way of coping, but they will never tell us how they do it. You describe a void so hollow in that penultimate stanza that I shiver.
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Thank you so much, Bjorn! Yes, sorry about that, it is rather bleak, it just came out like that. Some days I can’t help thinking about the whole Afghanistan situation and how it’s so easily being forgotten about in the news, and what women must be going through. Reality is bleak though, isn’t it? Hope it didn’t depress you! 🙂 ❤
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A tiny masterpiece here, indeed. You hooked me at “in places where women turn fury into razor intelligence, gut blues into daily cunning, to cradle a quiet dream or two.” We both used closed doors in our poetics–ah, great minds. When I could still drive, walk, and use my camera, I used to call my forays “imaging adventures”.
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Thank you so much, Glenn! I’m glad those lines resonated with you 🙂 “Imaging adventures” is a great way to describe it. I shall check yours out forthwith! 🙂
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So beautifully haunting, it put me into a dreary trance. You can feel a wound, a hole forming in one’s chest at such emptiness in the world or life–at least, what I’m interpreting from this piece. Absolutely beautiful, and as always, I’m beyond impressed with your work. I’m blown away.
Cats know the luxury of their own kingdom, why would they share their secrets with us when they still kill each other? 😛 My cats are crazy, Sunra, I tell you, they are crazy. Right now as I type this, I have four of them sleeping on my bed. Sleeping now? At a time like this? I just wish they’d show us their ways!
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Ha ha ha ha! That is hilarious! I love that you have four sleeping in your bed. I guess they expect you to read their mind, they’re like that. It’s all body language with them. Apparently, if a cat is near you, it likes you. And if it keeps touching you with its tail, it really adores you. That much I know, lol! Kind of like humans, I suppose. Though you probably don’t want them touching you with their tail, haha. I’ll stop there, I think!
Thank you so much for your kind words, I so appreciate it, Lucy. Though I didn’t mean to be depressing! I’m just always reminded of what privileges I have daily every time I see the news (even though I don’t have as much as others) and I can’t ignore it, my conscience won’t let me.
Anyway, thank you ❤
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It is strange to have experienced so many heartspurs in my life and yet not known the word to describe them! Thank you.
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Thank you so much, Peter! I also feel the same, and I’m glad I know the word for it too now 🙂 Thank you for stopping by and reading ❤
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A wonderful poem and a wistful acceptance is felt within it. This part jumped out at me:
“starlorn, wondering if the forecast
will again be coffin-shaped,”
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Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment, Lisa. ❤
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Sunra, you’re very welcome.
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Awesome job. I could read that over and over, the language is so rich and inventive!
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Thanks so much, qbit!! What a wonderful comment, how lovely of you to say! 🙂
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wondering if the forecast
will again be coffin-shaped
That so captures the world we live in now…(K)
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Thanks so much, K. My thoughts exactly ❤
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This poem is the perfect merge of two complex challenges … love it!
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Thank you so much, lovely Helen 💛
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I love this. Every line is so vivid and intriguing. And I love the cat photos!
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Thank you so much, JYP! 😊 💛
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Oh my, this is a gorgeous poem, Sunra. There are too many wondrous lines to only pick one, my dear friend. Excellent poetry. 💛
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Hey, thanks Jeff! I appreciate your lovely comment 🙂 x
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It is my pleasure. You’re always welcome, dear friend. 🤗
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